Is that I need a lovely spark?

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Chimes away and lights so dark,
Is this the way I should draw the arc,
Wandering lonely in a empty park,
Is that I need a lovely spark?

Trees blush as the breeze make a pass,
Seeing the roses that are best of the mass,
As I leave the gate that’s color of brass
Still many memories I can amass,

Flowers by the Path
Flowers by the Path

My memories keep me back at the park,
Of what I saw in the dark,
Of the chirping birds on their mark,
Waiting in wings just to embark,

Life comes to a standstill,
The breeze makes me feels the chill,
I want to go back and have my fill,
Sit with a book and my quill…

I wonder, is it my lovely spark?

All I need is to shine and sparkle,
Whatever is thrown at me, just buckle,
I don’t need to behave so fickle,
Sit calm and watch the stars twinkle…

A small poem about how to enjoy every moment of your life, lest you miss them and only have memories… btw, its original and written by me πŸ˜›

Comments

12 responses to “Is that I need a lovely spark?”

  1. Nishkam Avatar

    hi again!

    this is nice too, but i see problems with flow, the sentences appear sharp and sometimes unrelated, the narrative become fractured.great start,and i say this again you have poetic sense, but rhyming is holding you back! poems dont need to be rhymes! i feel you can do a lot better!

    wishes!

    1. Hemal Shah Avatar

      Thank you very much Nishkam πŸ™‚ critical views always help me do better πŸ™‚

  2. Chintan Shah Avatar
    Chintan Shah

    Nice!!!

    1. Hemal Shah Avatar

      Thank you dude!! You heard me πŸ™‚ welcome to ma blog

  3. Arti Avatar

    Lovely poem..Very good poet you are πŸ™‚

    1. Hemal Shah Avatar

      Thank you very much Arti.. πŸ™‚

  4. Annie Avatar
    Annie

    Its very nice hemal

    1. Hemal Shah Avatar

      Thank you very much Annie… πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚

  5. Monica Avatar

    claps πŸ™‚ it perfectly rhymed and a gud collection of thoughts πŸ™‚

    1. Hemal Shah Avatar

      Thank you very much Monica πŸ™‚ and welcome to my blog!!

  6. Kripa Avatar
    Kripa

    Good one, Hemal.

    1. Hemal Shah Avatar

      Hey Kripa, thank you very much πŸ™‚

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